4 Key Elements for a Killer Short Story

When I’m not writing blog posts for Lulu or drafting site copy, I’m writing short fiction. I’ll likely never be a novelist, nor do I aspire to write long-form. But I do draft something like 30 short stories a year because I simply love writing and find the challenge of creating a story with constricted word count fun.

With Lulu’s Share Your Scare contest starting, I’d take a moment to look at the key elements of great short stories I’ve observed and learned from great writers and teacher over the years.

What makes a great short story?

Short stories have to achieve a lot of story in only a few words. There are four elements that really make a story stand out: character, plot, setting, and tension. Balancing these elements is the first step to making your short story amazing.

And because Halloween is right around the corner and we want to help you submit a short story for our Share Your Scare contest, I’ll give some hints and tips to make those important elements work for a scary story.

Character

Kurt Vonnegut said that your short story should have “at least one character [your reader] can root for.” He also said, “Every character should want something.” Among the plethora of writing advice, Vonnegut has to offer, these two points about character are among my favorites.

First comes crafting a character who wants something. When I was younger, I never put a lot of thought into what my characters wanted. I treated them as caricatures, not imagining my characters to be real. Obviously, this was a mistake and my stories suffered for it.

In considering people in terms of their wants and desires, we can better understand them and create better stories about them. Your short fiction should focus on only a few characters, trying to get to the heart of what your protagonist wants.

I personally always write a line or two defining what a character wants, usually after I’ve written a rough draft and considered for a time that character in the context of the story.

For example, I drafted a story a few months ago about a woman who gets a phone call from her dead brother. Certainly, the story leans on the weird and fantastical side, but here’s the sentence I wrote for my protagonist after I finished the first draft:

Veronica wants: unmedicated happiness without the weight of her family and obligations hamstringing her.

In the story itself, I never actually delve into her issues with her family (beyond some illusions to strain) nor her medically induced attempts at happiness (aside from a line about sifting among pill bottles in her purse). What Veronica wants doesn’t actually impact the story in a large way, but understanding what she wants helped me better visualize her and bring her to life on the page.

And from knowing our character, it becomes possible to make them someone your reader can root for. I can’t think of a single short story I’ve read that had a truly unredeemable protagonist. Consider Flannery O’Connor’s classic, A Good Man is Hard to Find. The Grandmother is a nuisance to her family and ultimately leads them all to a terrible end. Yet it is hard not to root for her as the story unfolds. Possibly because we know with a fair certainty what she wants, but also in part because O’Connor is simply a masterful storyteller.

Regardless, the presence of a character the reader wants to see succeed drives the story forward and gives that character depth and humanity. We need a character we can attach ourselves too so we can feel involved in the story.

Plot

I kind of hate the idea of plot in a story. It should just happen, right? Like, we start with an idea, add some events around that idea, work the characters into people we can see and feel for, and refine the text until the story is done. Where does the plot fit in?

Here’s a definition I really like that I think helps explain why plot matters: “the sequence of events inside a story which affect other events through the principle of cause and effect.” What I like about this definition is that it doesn’t demand that you create a plot; rather it simply must be acknowledged.

I tend to think of the plot as the element I’m creating when I write a story. I’m not writing down the individual events that make up the plot or some dialog or flowery descriptions. I’m writing all of these things into each other, coming out the other side with a story – the plot is a byproduct.

That doesn’t mean you can ignore the plot. For a short story though, you can think about the plot a little less than you would for a novel. Let your characters drive the story, and let the plot be a bit more naturally evolving.

Setting

I have to say, Setting is my favorite part of short fiction. Unlike a longer piece, you won’t be visiting many locations within your story. The settings you do visit really need to shine.

Setting also tends to give your story texture and depth, making the place and time real for the reader through carefully shared details. You also have the opportunity to really play with form in the setting by creating a sense of place in a variety of interesting ways.

Take, for example, The Short Happy Life of Francis Macomber by Ernest Hemingway. In this story, Hemingway establishes the setting without specifying exactly where we are. By placing a premium on shade, mentioning the “dirty boots” and “baked red” of Macomber’s face, we get a picture of a rustic, hot location. Hemingway puts us on the African plains without telling us that’s where we are; rather he paints a picture that reminds us, whether we’ve been to Africa or not, of what that place should be like.

This masterful use of setting also establishes the tone of the story. Beyond simply telling us where the action of the story is happening, the setting reveals the moods and emotions of the characters, while giving a further reference point the reader can cling too.

In my experience of reading and creating short fiction, the setting is the most often underutilized elements. Don’t miss an opportunity to add important texture to the story in a lush setting.

Tension

Tension is often referred to as Conflict, but essentially what it means is the element of your short story that drives the action. What makes the protagonist do what they do? What forces the actions that lead to the events of the story?

I don’t like to define this element as Conflict because that almost demands there be some confrontation or altercation. Tension, to me, is more accurate because there need not be any resolution or winner in the story.

Rather, I prefer the idea of tension; elements that raise our concerns, that make us wonder what will happen next and how our protagonist will react to those events. Elements that can be dangerous, but can also be sad or heartwarming or even frustrating. The tension will propel the story.

I find that most of my stories start with a point of tension and develop from there. From the earliest idea to the completed story, the one constant is the tension that drives the action.

Share Your Scare: Second Edition

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With all the above in mind, I invite you to test your short story technique with Lulu’s second annual Share Your Scare contest.

Just write a story of 1500 words or less that scares, surprises, or amazes us and submit it to contests@lulu.com. Your story will have a chance to win a spot in our 2018 short story collection, along with a free printed copy of the anthology. Check out our Contests Page to learn more.

To help get those frighteningly creative juices flowing, I’ve got a few bonus tips about writing scary stories:

  1. Remember the four elements above and write your scary story just like any short fiction piece
  2. Focus on suspense before scare; if you aim to keep readers wanting to read, the scary lines will have even more impact
  3. Intensify emotions; use your setting here to great effect by laying in drama and tension through the location alone
  4. Use real and believable elements (a county fair, a normal trick or treating adventure, a casual pagan ritual) to lull readers into a sense of calm
  5. Then twist it! Make liberal use of plot and tension twists, turning the story on end at just the right moment to surprise and wow your reader

And of course, be creative and have fun! I personally can’t wait to start reading the submissions.

5 thoughts on “4 Key Elements for a Killer Short Story”

  1. Good advice! Hewever, you have confused two similar-sounding words with very different meanings: illusion and allusion. When you refer to Kurt Vonnegut, you allude to him. That’s an allusion to a writer familiar to many. If I mention a well-known character like Bugs Bunny, it reminds you of a beloved cartoon character. An allusion is a reminder. But an illusion is like a mirage, something that looks like a pool of water in the distance, but that”s really not. It’s just heat shimmering in the air, like an optical illusion. English is chock full of confusing word pairs like this!

  2. Good techniques to write an interesting short story, would try’n write one for helloween.
    Thanks for your insightful tips Lulu.

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